Hello Class:
How do the detail's in Quiononez's excerpt, capture your sensory organs (touch, see, smell, taste, hear)? Which of your senses are you able to you use in this brief excerpt? What role does detailed information play in critical thinking through writing, reading and observation?
This post should be answered before class on Thursday.
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Ms. Wanzo
73 comments:
Misty Horn
English 5
Raquel Wanzo
2/3/10
1. Details activate the sensory organs, which allows for a better grasp of what the wrtiter is trying to relay.
2. The details affected my seeing,touch and smelling senses. As they writer described the environment, I visualized or visioned what it could look like. Drawing on my memory, I could smell the water from the hydrants and beer wrapped in brown paper bags as well as imagine what the objects in the excerpt felt like.
3. Detailed info. plays a role in citical thinking through writing because the writer has to first know his or her target audience well and from their write in way that captures them. The writer has to think about was going to register with the and how. When observing you take in more detail verses just glancing or looking. By observing you learn more about people and situations.By observing you automatically think a little deeper, not so quick to judge the surface. Detail in reading helps put a person in the shoes of the story teller or help with being present in the story. Detail helps the reader stop and think about the surrondings and or just ponder on things of relation and maybe bring some type of profound moment.
In his writing, Ernesto Quiononez is able to capture our sensory organs with his colorful writing style. I have never heard or Ernesto Quiononez, but from this excerpt, I can instantly tell that he has a really exciting writing style that has a type of passion or "flare" instilled in them. He goes into detail about things in his writing and illlustrates his writing in a way that can grab the reader's attention. What I feel that Quiononez does really well is that he is able to capture our sences without always having to turn to adjectives; he is able to paint a beautiful and illustrative scene just by picking the right things in the scene to mention. For example, he never mentioned that the scene was fun, but from the details that he chose to point out, we can infer that the scene was fun because the people were dancing and having a great time talking to people and there was exciting music playing in a beautiful night. He describes these little details in a colorful manner, and in effect, these details describe the scene in a beautiful manner. These little things that he mention describes the scene and are what make his account of the night complete. Instead of just describing the scene as if he were a person looking at the scene, he descibed it as if he were a person in the scene, which dramatically makes his writing more appealing to the audience.
Quiononez's writing activates four of my senses: touch, seeing, tasting, and hearing. From the excerpt, I can feel the "hot spring night" taking place, I can see the beautiful scene in the dark that is glorified from "moonlight mak[ing] everything glow like pearls," I can taste the flavor of the Budweiser that the old men were drinking, and I can hear the music "blaring from a boom box" in the maraca. I can also feel the emotions of the main character in the story because he talks to a rat and asks it a question. Normally, a regular person would not talk to a street rat, but the narrator was so happy that he didn't care about what he did or how stupid he looked. The fun and happiness made him feel loose and free so that he was able to talk to rat comfortably.
Detailed information plays an important part in critical thinking because information is really all that we have. Information is what we know, and in critical thinking, it will usually be what we want others to know. Since information is like our weapons, we have to make sure wer have the best detailed information so that we have the best weapons. Detailed information is important because it grabs the reader's attention and makes them want to keep reading. It is really important because we have to make sure that we spark our audience's attention in a way so that they actually care about what we have to say. After all, there is no point in critical thinking if no one cares about what anyone else has to say. Detailed information also helpes to give our writing and arguments more strenth and credibility so that we can sway more people to our sides. Information will also usually be the reason as to why we are on a side, so if we have more detailed information, it shows that we have many reasons as opposed to have very little reason.
Ernesto Quiononez's "Spanish Harlem at Night" tickled all of my sensory organs. I touched the boom box that was blasting salsa music, the skipping rope the kids were playing with, and the dominoes the older men were playing with. As for see, I saw the women dancing, the kids playing, the girls flirting, and the boys showing off. I could smell the humid weather in the Spanish Harlem and the sweat and heat from everybody dancing. Everyone could hear the excitement coming from the music, the kids, the mothers, the girls and the boys.
Quiononez does a great job in explaining very well what is happening and that helps the reader immensely. If the reader tries hard enough, he/she can envision himself/herself in that dance party too.
Just as Quiononez helped us transport ourselves to Spanish Harlem, we too can, through writing, reading, and observing.
If we wrote "I went to the park today" vs. "I went to Oakland park today and saw the birds chirping, and seniors practicing tai-chi, and saw owners in raincoats with their wet furry animals running around little kids playing on the swings", we are observing, writing and helping the reader read in a most critical fashion.
The details touch my sensory organs alot of ways. When he says its a hot spring night that coincides with feel. He also captured sight by vividly describing the whole scene. The excerpt brought out my seeing, touching, and hearing senses. I think its important to use detailed information in Critical Thinking because the more details you have in your writing, the more the reader will be engaged. It will help the reader actually feel like he is there.
The details provided in Quinonez's excerpt allows readers to have a sense of what is being described. It enables us to picture the image in our heads and feel as if we are witnessing it ourselves.
From the details, I was able to hear the salsa music playing on the boom box and see the women dancing and children playing happily together. You can smell the scent of the Budweiser the old men were drinking and feel the warm yet cool atmosphere of the "hot spring night".
In regards to critical thinking, detail is an important element in writing. Good detail allow readers to feel connected to the writer and experience the same feelings through the writer's perspective. We are able to put in words what we observe in our everyday lives with detailed information just as Quinonez did with his excerpt on "Spanish Harlem at Night".
The details in Quiñonez’s excerpt capture my sensory organs because the adjectives, verbs, nouns and metaphors cannot be interpreted without recalling all of my five senses at some point.
At different times, all of my five senses are called into action. Quiñonez’s metaphorical comparison of El Barrio to a maraca and its inhabitants “transformed as seeds,” captured both my hearing and vision because of prior exposure to that instrument within the Latin jazz genre.
Also, I could recall the experience of a “…hot spring night,” because of how sweaty I got at night during the spring while living in Iowa many years ago. The sweat would bead upon my skin, humidity preventing it from evaporating.
Because of my interest in Latin jazz, I could hear a medium tempo/4-count beat that is common in salsa music. Also, I could imagine the clattering dominoes and the crash of empty Budweiser bottles hitting the trash.
My sense of taste was engaged, unfortunately, when Quiñonez described the brand of beer the “old men” were drinking. Next, my sense of smell was tickled as the narrator walked past multiple piles of trash.
Quiñonez’s description of Spanish Harlem at night, various teenagers, dancing couples “with one eye on their partner,” “one garbage heap,” and the rat caused me to imagine the scene.
As with the Scudder blog assignment, the gathering of data opens greater possibilities for more complex reasoning. In this case, I gathered this data through the use of my five senses.
In Quiononez's excerpt, his description about Spanish Harlem at nighttime captured my sensory organs in many ways. He described the enviornment which captured my vision and my sense. At the beginning, he told it was a hot spring and as result, I felt that I was placed myself in such weather.He also draw that how happy people were and what they were doing on the street. These gave me strongly visual impact.
Detailed information in critical thinking plays an important role because it helps author to capture readers interests. The smooth the details are showed, the more vivid the essay will be. And also, detailed information helps audience get writer's points more precise and discover what author try to state.
Racquel to Ricky T:
I think that Quiñonez's writing captured our senses of taste and hearing in a similar fashion.
For example, I could taste the Budweiser and hear the maraca. However, my interpretation of Quiñonez's use of the word "maraca" is different than yours.
I agree that detailed information gives our writing "more strength and credibility."
In Ernesto Quiononez's expert he is able to capture my sensory organs through the details and describtion he has given us. He writes in a way that will lead us to imagination and to describe his setting in a way to make the reader feel like we're there with him.
While reading the expert I am able to use my senses which are seeing,hearing,smell,and tasting. I can picture what Spanish Harlem looks like with the children playing and the people dancing. I can hear the loud music coming from the boom box and I can feel the the bass or vibration from the boom box. I can hear the childreqn laughing and the jump rope making a whistle noise. I can smell the fresh air on that spring night. I can taste the budweisers the old men are drinking.
Detailed information plays an important part in critical thinking because it helps the readers imagination and also draws the the reader in. It can also help us to prove our point in which we are trying to get across in writing. In observation detailed information can give us a visual outlook on how we might picture something. Everyone doesn't see and think alike.
Ernesto Quinonez's Spanish Harlem's excerpt easily captured my sensory organs such as taste, hearing and sight. His extremely detail oriented and vivid description of people and surrounding was captivating. When he said "...when everything broken and dirty is hidden by darkness and the moonlight makes everything else glow like pearls", I could see my necklace glowing the moonlight as if I was in the crowd, listening to salsa music with bottle of cold Budweiser in my hand. His writing pulls you in and allures you in a way that I can't even describe with my poor writing skills. In critical thinking, where observing and gathering data is extremely important, this kind vivid and detail oriented writing helps us to feel and absorb the data through our sensory organs instead of just "reading".
To Yilin Deng,
I have to agree with you in Quiononez's expert when he described the weather and season that drew me in and with the other descriptions. All of my sensory oragns were used while reading this expert.
In the excerpt, Quiononez was able capture the audience’s sensory organs by using descriptive words and adjectives. The reader is able to feel every detail that’s going on in the Spanish Harlem, from the glow of the moonlight to the people interacting with one another. The speaker describes what he observes in his environment, which engulfs reader to visualize his experience. Quiononez shows that the speaker enjoys living in the ghetto, being happy enough to say “hello to a rat”. I was able to see, hear, and smell what was going on within the chaotic atmosphere. I imaged the stench of alcohol pouring out the elders as they played dominoes. Every part of the ghetto came to live as all of the senses worked together in creating a realistic interpretation. Detailed information plays an important role in critical thinking in that it creates a sense of mood for the reader, making the writing interesting. It helps to engage the reader by having them gather information from the text. They use this to see and connect with what the writer is trying get across.
Solongo to Daniel Melek:
I also think that this kind of detailed and vivid writings helps us to "feel" and draw in data through our sensory organs whereas just "reading" can't stimulate our sensory organs other than sight.
I agree that a sense of mood is necessary for a reader to get drawn into the excerpt or book. If the reader doesn't have any idea about how this work is supposed to make him feel, he feels lost. A direction is needed for the reader to get the most out of the reading.
After reading Ernesto Quiononez's "Spanish Harlem at Night," the details in this excerpt try to display a picture in the front of our audiences. It describe how people acting in this enviroment throught their sensory manners. As like I am participating the activities with them in this scence, and my sensory organs were beatting and trying to explode.
From the details, my sensory organs have been broke out at the same time,for example,I can see the women dacing and hear the kids playing hopscoth.
with detailed information in critical thinking, it can really help the audicences to capture what information the writer try to show and connect the writer's feelings.
In my opinions, the author used his good writing skills to bring all the readers together. For example, he tried to use his feeling, his seeing, and his dancing to show the readers how the Spanish came together. In fact, he tried to let the people who was not in the dance party but would have the same feeling as the author though. Like in the excerpt, his directive the people’s looking, dressing and feeling etc. He tried to give the readers more impressible.
Detailed information takes an important part in the writing. It can help the reader feel more the feeling as the writer’s feeling. It could bring all the readers to the views what the writer saw. Furthermore, it could have more space for the readers think more in critically way.
Shukun Li
I agree with you Ke Yu. In fact, when we write essay, we would like to let other can understand our feeling and we would like to let other can understand or share our seeing and feeling.I belived the write use that way to bring all the readers toghter.
I do agree with Meuy S.opinons becasue the author trys to bring all information together to form a picture so that we can feel all kinds of senses in one perspective.
With the detailed information the author provides in his/her writing, we can get the same feeling as we read his/her writing and connect to the writer.
Quiononez captures our sensory organs by using a very detailed writing style. The adjectives and verbs he used also made the scene more visible. The excerpt actually made me use most of my senses at some point. I could hear the music playing from the boom box on the cement. I could smell the Budweisers in the brown bags. I could even feel how hot it was at the moment. I could see and picture the beautiful night scene and just see everyone having a great time. He made it possible to visualize all this by using very distinctive details when describing things such as the dancers, children, and the teenagers with jewelry and tattoos.
Detailed information can play a huge role in critical thinking. With a good amount of details, we can almost picture ourselves at the destination described. Once that happens, we have a better visual and understanding of what's going on.
The details in Quiononez’s excerpt capture my sensory organs by seeing through my imagination as he sets up things I have registered in my mental library. I am able to use my senses related to touch as I think of the women who were salsa dancing with their partners, and with the children playing hopscotch or skipping rope. I can sense hearing the salsa music playing. I can visualize the men playing domino’s drinking their Budweisers wrapped in a brown paper bag. Detailed information plays a major role in critical thinking through writing, reading and observation by stating what the surrounding details are of a particular person or place. A writer’s details can take you to that exact place and time when descriptive details are given.
Jen Christopher to Werdah Kaiser
I agree that the details written by the author that arouses a person’s senses gives a reader direction. These senses can make a person relate and pull the reader more into the writing when a detailed description is given.
Quiononez had me at the hot spring night and hooked me with the maraca. I couldn't stop reading at that point. For me when I read I am always putting myself in the action, imagining myself there. I am finished with work leaning out an open window watching it all unfold below me. All his details transport me there and it feels real.
My mind adds to the melee, I can smell food and the music is loud. I watch Quinonez walk through it all and wonder where he is off to.
When I write it is my job to share what is on my mind. I can't paint so there will be no pretty illustrations to look at to clue you into the point I was attempting to make. I have to paint with words and lay them down so as to make you wonder where I am off to, hook you, and then transport you to my vision of reality. Providing you with all the relevant details, keeping you actively engaged is my mission. I want to hold your interest up to and throughout the conclusion. I cannot do that without details, they are my paint.
In “Spanish Harlem at Night" Ernesto Quinonez excited my eyes without evening having an image. His sensory details swarmed my head immediately and let me see a picture painted so vivid i never wanted to stop reading.
My Sensory organs that were captured are seeing, hearing, and touching. I used my seeing sensory actively because his words let me paint my own scene to understand where he came from. I loved when he said “Spanish Harlem looks better in the dark when everything broken and dirty is hidden by darkness” the description put me in the mindset that I was night. I loved that all his words flowed together to make you want be a part of the story.
Ernesto style of writing is different because it’s colorful. Detailed writing is extremely important for critical thinking because it allows your readers to understand where you coming from without prior knowledge of the story. Through reading and observation you pay closer attention to the words used. You really don’t need to pay that much attention to this excerpt because it captures you from the first word. Ernesto Quinonez is a brilliant writer. I hope one day to write a paragraph as well illustrated as he has.
Alisha Taylor To Pink:
I love how you say he puts you put yourself in the action i feel the same way i to do this. I can image and almost see myself in this story. Wasnt it amazing how he painted a picture with only words?
Also, i think i can paint a picture with my wriritng i just want to know how to capture my audience. Any ideas?
The details in Quiononez's excerpt is able to capture our senses by giving us a clear picture of what happened.When we read it, we feel like we are on the scene.
In his excerpt, we are able to use the following senses:see,hear,smell and taste.We see heap of garbage, hear sound of music, smell and taste of beer.He uses figurative language (use of metophor) for example wherehe said, "The moonlight makes everything else glow like pearls, transformed as seeds".
It is important that in critical thinking we use detailed information so that we can capture reader's attention. Make them excited to have the urge of reading more.It also enables readers to visualize what the writer is talking about.
I really like how you equated the fun and happiness going on with making the narrator feel loose and free enough to talk to a rat. Though I did read that part I didn't come to that conclusion. This was a great observation on your part.
Quionoez was able to capture my sensory organs; he was very detailed in what he was trying to bring to the audience. His writing made it very visual and well describe to how he wants the viewers to see and feel how he was feeling at that moment as you were right next to him.
With regards to critical thinking…the story that Quionoez wrote was a short story which it was able to connect and help the audience visualize the scene and also you were able to collect a lot of information from what the author is trying to say.
David
I like the away you explained the sense of touch for,"the skipping rope of the kids".I had tried to figure out how it could be applied in Quiononez's excerpt but now I've an idea.
Also I liked the way you tried to make us understand by driving your point home.
There is an author who lived a while back and all she wanted to do was to write gothic romance novels. Meanwhile she would write these great letters to her publisher about her neat life in the small town where she had moved to get away from it all.
He loved reading those letters and they were so easy for her to write as they were about the life unfolding around her.
He convinced her to write a book about that and lay off the romance. She did and won a Pulitzer prize for her efforts.
Write about what gets you excited, what you love or hate, and write the truth. In my last class a girl in my group wanted to write about her iphone and how much she loved it. I was like, BORING... Capture your audience with something interesting!
The details in Ernesto Quiononez's "Spanish Harlem at Night" captured my sensory organs in almost all forms. For example as Quiononez starts his excerpt I can feel the “hot spring night” on my skin because I have experienced that kind of weather before. I flashed back to last summer in Costa Rica and recollected on the warm nights underneath the moon beaming across the skyline. Quiononez also made me see into the El Barrio by being very specific in terms of the descriptions and clever metaphors. I felt like I was one of those people jamming to the beats, dancing the night away. He even triggered my taste sensory with the cold beer the old men were drinking. And finally, my sense of smell awoke when he ended with the rat running “from one garbage heap to another.”
Detailed information plays a huge role in terms of critical thinking in that it can help the reader have a clear understanding of what you are trying to communicate, and better connections are made to both the reader and writer. If you can picture what your reading, your more likely to have stronger connections.
The details in Quiononez's excerpt capture my sensory organs because he is considerably descriptive. His writing allows me to use my see, smell, and taste senses. I can visually imagine the hot spring night, and a sort of fiesta going on. I can see an urban environment, dancing, kids playing, hyrdants open, teenagers flirting with on another, old men playing dominoes while drinking beer, and him greeting a rat. Through my personal experience, I know the scent of a budweiser and the taste of it. Also I can also smell the a trash can, when he had greeted the rat because he was filled with joy.
The role of detailed information is crucial in critical thinking because it will allow one to have a better understanding in a writing, reading, and observation. It also creates more interest for the audience, and it will let them have some sort of entertainment. With detailed information, it will let one to have an opinion and perspective. This a useful tool for one to pertain in critical thinking. Without this it makes it difficult on the audience to state an opinion and also the writing can be considered dull.
I liked how you broke everything down and gave a very detailed description on how your sensory organs were triggered. What a great way to turn on our senses. Do you think all senses come from life experiences?
When Quinonez describes the scene, your senses are immediately in full function. The mere simplicity of his descriptions are the key factors to one's active senses. One can "feel" the heat of that "hot spring night". You can "hear" the salsa music, "see" the glow of the pavement. You can "taste" the Budweisers the old men drink. Detailed information plays an important role in critical thinking. It allows the thinker to read and actually observe what the text is trying to say. Through observing and gaining a full knowledge of the information afoot, one can be confident in their ideas and opinions on the matter.
-Julie Kvalen
Julie Kvalen to Anna Davies
This excerpt really did draw on your experiences. I felt the same about the "hot spring night".
Isn't it funny what words can do?
Quinonez first captured me by his discription of the people and their transformation, I actually pictured a maraca shaking and seeds surrounding it in the streets of Harlem at a block party! The first sense was my sight. He invited me to the party with his very detailed description. I felt the warm air and heard the music from the boom box. I felt like a bystander, like the narrator of the story. I felt the mist from the hydrant and heard children playing and laughing.
By being detailed when telling a story offers the reader a chance to join you on your journey. It gives a connection from your world to many others. Like in Quinonez's story, I was able to experience Harlem even though I've never physically been there. If I had any reservations about visiting Spanish Harlem because of its description as a "ghetto", this story has given me another look, a different side, one much more exciting and inviting. Details in a story are the views from the author, their thoughts, feelings, actions etc. This challenges/peeks intrest in the mind of the reader. Details don't necessarily change the mind of the reader (although it's possible), but they give you something to think about before making a final decision about the subject. It's hard to persuade someone with a one liner. "The grass massaged my feet as I walked through the park, the garden of lilies brought an amazing aroma while the waterfall played a tune in my ear" (sounds corny,lol, I'm not a story writer yet,lol) sounds better than "I was at the park, it was cool, you should go." In other words, give me a reason to see things your way and start by giving me details.
Chanda W.
TO: Julie Kvalen
i like how you said "your senses are immediately in full function." the way the author write this, you just automatically visualize what he trying to explain to you.
Pink!
I love the way you said you were leaning out of the window. I can totally see that, especially in Harlem. As soon as I read that I thought of this movie calle "Women of Brewster Place". The details as your paint, your canvas. Love it! Good read...keep'em coming.
Ernesto Quinonez has overall "portrayed" an extraordinarily realistic and vivid image of Spanish Harlem at night, by using appropriate combinations of dictions and phrases. The verbal depiction captures multiple of my senses, so I am enabled to actually feel the images although they are in-distance. In general, this excerpt has frequently used metaphor as a writing strategy to build relationships between similar things, during the descriptions of particular scenes. For instance, the phrase "like all ghettos" indicates how similar Spanish Harlem is compared to all ghettos, but as a more significant function, doing so may induce readers to unconsciously relate the Spanish Harlem to other ghettos, so assist them to observe the scene more “closely.” Furthermore, the word "pearl" is used with exactly the same purpose – to better visualize the image by emphasizing how elegant and gorgeous the Spanish Harlem appears to be at night.
The author’s success in depicting Spanish Harlem may also be reflected to all the adjectives within the excerpt that are sensory related, including vision, touch and hearing. My sense of touch has initially been stimulated when Quinonez introduces the setting as "a hot spring night." I seem to physically feel the temperature bit by bit as the ambience gets excited when the dancing starts. Moreover, the detailed narration in individual's behavioral status – "danced with one eye", "playing hopscotch, cullies with bottle caps, or skipping rope," and "played dominos as they drank Budweisers" – has launched my visual sense with all the imaginations I "observed" from such narration. In addition, when the dialogs are quoted in the excerpt, "Hey, dusty guy. Where are you going, eh?", I seem to simultaneously hear their mood and tone as well, which refer to the context, is full of pleasure.
Thoughts that are devised from critical thinking will be acknowledged if and only if they are established on abundant amounts of information as resources. Regardless whether it is for writing, reading or observation, critical thinkers must collect enough evidences that may prove their position. Specific information will precisely offer them various kinds of details that their thoughts or ideas may be developed from. On the other side, as readers, detailed information will easily promote them to understand and then consent to what the authors attempt to say. In this case, Quiononez has used vivid descriptions to capture readers' senses, thus made them easier to feel the complete portray of Spanish Harlem.
The well-written detailed description in Quinonez's excerpt captured my sight successfully by showing me a clear picture about the party that was mentioned. The writer used personification and simile, such as “dirty is hidden”; “moonlight makes everything else glow like pearls”, in the description, which not only attracted readers interest in story but also struck a sympathetic response in the hearts of the readers.
In Quinonez’s description, it captured my hearing, my sight, my smell, and my feeling; I seemed like to be personally on the scene where the writer tried to show me: people were dancing, shaking, moving; children were playing. I could really feel their happiness and jolly time they had.
In my opinion, detailed information plays an extremely important role in critical thinking because it works as a director in a movie: director try the best to express the connotative meaning or soul of script by using different methods of shoots from various angles. Similar to detailed information, it show readers actual story and the environment where the story happens using different devise to capture readers’ sensory organ, which help to create better communication and understanding between writers and readers.
From details in Quiononez
excerpt, captured my sensory organs of see and smell. It allows me to create a vivid image in my mind and I was able to see women dancing to the salsa music joyfully. Also, I can imagine the unpleasant smell coming from the Budweiser that the Old men was drinking. The tone of the scene seems to create a visual image of the "hot spring night" of Harlem.
The detailed information allows me to think critically about the passage. I am able to think, perceive, and feel the author’s observation. Quiononez sensory organs show that we can improve our writings by being able to observe and explain in details.
Hello Jane,
I like when you mention that it is important that in critical thinking we use detailed information so that we can capture reader’s attention. I agree that if we have no detail information in our writings it will likely sound boring. It is important that we express our ideas with details.
To Rebecca,
I agree that the detailed information presented in the excerpt helps us as readers to feel connected to the writer's feelings. I also felt that through the details we are able to gain a new perspective at how we view things at a different level.
In Quiononez’s excerpt, it captured my sensory organs by using his detailed descriptions of a crowded party that was held in Spanish Harlem, New York City. He described the scene of touch, sight, taste, and hearing by picturing the people jumping, shaking, moving their bodies around, and dancing with their companions by following the music that came out from a loud boom box. He observed a rat was passing across. Besides, he saw the children were playing hopscotch and the old men were playing dominoes. He narrated the taste by showing the scene of “the old men drank Budweisers wrapped in brown bags.” When I was reading his excerpt, it seems I was there dancing and playing around with people in a nice pearl night.
The detailed information plays a significant role in writing, reading, and observing an object. It could bring readers into the big picture. For instance, it could lead readers to follow the path of the compositions and make the writings more understandable and interesting.
I agree with you, Anna. I also notice that the author had used a lot of metaphor in this excerpt. I believe this is a writing strategy that we may use in our future writings. It will not only provide details for the text, but also help readers understand the writing much easier.
I truly admire your idea about "connection." Indeed, if readers get lost in a writing, then no matter how much detailed information it provides, what it is doing is just to further confuse them. I think this relates to the topic about how we should add more and more information as possible, but keep them organized simultaneously.
how do the detail's in Quiononez's excerpt, capture your sensory organs? was by his selection of metaphors used to capture the audience and draw them to the story
Which of your senses are you able to you use in this brief excerpt? I was able to use a variety of senses mainly touch, because his invite was so alive he had me feeling like i was a part of this community and participated from watching the kids hopscotch to the old men playing dominoes.
the role in which the way Quinonez uses his descriptions to evoke Spanish Harlem looks better in the dark when everything broken and dirty is hidden by darkness and the moonlight makes everything glow like pearls", to me he is eliminating the negativity and allowing the audience to see the the potential out of something that can so easily be overlooked. by highlighting the festivities it allowed me to feel involved and gave me a passage way to enjoying his culture genuinely without distraction. he took the smallest thing as a rat and brought it to life. the party was very lively and his character detail allowed the reader to associate with there emotions at that time in spanish harlem. critically thinking about the piece tells me that he found something to reel the audience into his world then made them feel welcome. although unfamiliar with his culture i was still able to enjoy the festivities as an invited guest. the reading also had me curious about the remaining events. he teased my senses and piqued my imagination.
hello Anna,
I think we have the same opinion about the important role of detailed description played in critical thinking. It capture readers sensory organs in order to help show readers actual story and the environment where the story happens, which help to create better communication and understanding between writers and readers. The time when readers are able to be personally on scene what writers intend to show them is the writers' success.
I agree with your viewpoints. Through the reading, I could feel the boisterous night in Spanish Harlem. The vivid pictures captured my interest to continue my reading. To improve our critical thinking skill, we need to observe our surroundings carefully and describe in more detailed. It's important to capture readers interest and easy to understand the writer’s objective.
Quiononez used detailed descriptions to capture my sensory organs. At the very beginning, he said “…it was a hot spring night.” This gave me a directly feeling about the environment at that crazy night. He used a lot of verbs to describe people’s action. Those verbs made people alive. I was able to see that they were dancing and playing around. The excerpt also captured my hearing. I could almost hear the music coming from the boom box and the sweet talk from the teenage girls.
Quiononez’s detailed descriptions told me that he did a very careful observation at that night. It enabled him to show, instead of just state, how happy and crazy the people were. That, I believe, is very important in critical thinking as well. When we try to write an essay to persuade others, we cannot just state our argument. We have to provide detailed evidences to support it. And, a good observation gives us the opportunity to find convincing evidences.
First of all, this brief excerpt is very interesting. At the beginning, Quinonez tried to let us imagine that we were in the hot weather. He described that it was a hot spring night as a clue to lead to the following contexts that people came out to dance and hang out around El Barrio. Especially in the modern times, the average of the temperature of the weather is keep growing up; it is very easy to capture my sensory organs. And one I really like is he described people transformed as seeds. It is very easy to image that how people jump, run, and dance around there, I seem to dance with them. Furthermore, “They danced with one eye on their partner and one eye on their children”, “old men played dominos as the drank”, he used those beautiful and interesting words to described the scene as well, and make the excerpt more interesting. With all the details that Quinonez described, I can picture what was happening right there in my head.
We cannot write a good essay without details. It is also happening to critical thinking. Details can capture readers’ interest as well. Details can help readers to understand easily and lead them to think with more deeply.
Hi Ricky,
I am Rui.I agree with your points. Detailed information is very important for writing. Without details, we cannot understand well from reading. Sometimes, we not only need reader to read our writings, but also need them to feel what we are writing. Therefore, in critical thinking, we do need details to make our writing more powerful and interesting.
After i read Ernesto Quiononez's "Spanish Harlem at Night", it captured all my sensory organs. The author described the Spanish Harlem night very detailed. it showed how and what the people do in Spanish harlem.For example, the sentence "Hydrants were....on the cement." it captured my hera and see sensory organs.Also he described his feeling at end of the excerpt. I think the sense of hear would be use it this excerpt,because this Harlem is the party, many people meet together to have fun .They are talking, singing , smelling ,and playing music. Therefore, hear is able to use in this excerpt.i think the role that detailed imformation does in critical through writting reading and observation is like a magnifier.To record ,to clear and discorver .
TO RUI MAI
i agree with your points. Detailed is the most impotant thing in writting.detailed is the tool gives the reader a idea to think about how the something look like. we cannot writting an intersting essay without any of the detail in a subject or object . It could not capture the reader .
In this excerpt "Spanish Harlem at Night" from Ernesto Quinones, I am captured my sensory organs by the beautiful words he used in describing the environment at night, such as the lively adjectives and verbs. He could capture my senses in describing the things what people are doing very livelily, just like seeing a movie in my mind.
To me, I could touch the rope that the children are skipping and also the dominoes that the old men are playing when I'm reading this excerpt. Moreover, because of Ernesto's lively description about people, I could see that people are dancing and shaking their bodies, and I also could hear the music and the sound of water from the opened hydrants. Also, I could smell the scent from beer and even I could taste it.
In the critical thinking, detailed information plays an important role that provides assistance for readers to draw an image in their minds to think deeply when they are reading. Because of this function of detailed information, we can have an image to make the reading more interesting and observe the reading clearly, so that we can think the different aspects of an issue easily.
Hello Martin Lara,
I agree with your point in the role of detailed information plays in critical thinking. To me, I also think that detailed information is an useful tool to assist readers to get more details when they are reading. Also, readers can have an image in their mind to think the different aspects deeply.
I find that the use of simple words and details help ignite my senses. Words such as "Budweiser" ignited my sense of smell to my sense of hearing through the music "blaring from a boom box" Quiononez was able to be very descriptive in a limited amount of words which makes this excerpt impressive. Not only can you feel the speaker's emotions, but through the simple details you can practically imagine yourself as being part of the scene.
From the excerpt i was able to exercise most of my senses. Throughout the passage i was able to see what everyone is doing. In my eyes it was just one big party with everyone having their own cliques. The elderly folks had their own table playing dominoes, the women were dancing to salsa with their significant others, the children were playing with their friends, and the young girls were trying to hook up with the local thugs. I can smell and taste the bitter alcohol roaming around the air. I can hear the sound of salsa music traveling all around the neighborhood.
The use of details is pivotal in critical thinking through writing, reading, and observation. First of all, through the use of details it help readers create a motion picture in their heads to have a better understanding of what is happening. Secondly, details help attract the readers' attention to continue reading. It is just too dull to read simple sentences such as "He went to the park" or "He ate a sandwich" throughout a passage. By not using details it will not give a lasting impression on the reader and soon enough when the passage gets dull enough the reader will forget what the author wrote about.
Hello, Martin. I like your interesting point. Indeed, detailed and lively description can grasp audiences’ attention. That is very useful in writing a persuasive essay. If people don’t even want to read our essay, how could we persuade them to accept our ideas?
Hello Anna! I am completely on your side with your viewpoint on the use of details. I also feel that without the use of details it will be harder for the reader to make a connection with the author. This is important because as a reader you want to know what the author is aiming for. The use of good details not only can help make words come alive, but they can also help us communicate.
Racquel to Anna:
Biological components notwithstanding, are triggered most when new experiences can be connected to old ones as part of an ongoing learning experience.
Thank you for your comments!
In this article "Spanish Harlem at Night" from Ernesto Quinones, I captured my sensory organs by the author's really beautiful description about the scene. It seems like I can see what he sees, can feel what he feels, just like I was standing next to him.
Four of my senses: touch, seeing, tasting, and hearing are all attracted by the details in the article. It was a "hot spring night", people were spending there time in the ghetto in El Barrio. I could smell the helmet hot air there from these words. Unlike the daytime, the people who lived there were talking, drinking, playing and dancing. Even we know that they lived in the poor place, but all we can feel is happiness. They enjoyed their life, even a rat could be affected by this phenomena.
Ernesto Quiononez describes many little details in a colorful way, and these descriptions make our audience can easily get related to his feeling.
In critical thinking, detail information plays an important role because it can persuade, inform, and convince the audience about the author's thesis and purpose. Expanding the idea in critical thinking is important, on the other hand, we also need detail information to support our opinions and make it sounds more reasonable. And it's a lot help to capture the reader's eyes.
Hi Brandywine,
I agree with you the author was "eliminating the negativity and allowing the audience to see the the potential out of something". It shows a unfamiliar scene of a ghetto, which is different to what we usually knowed. And the detail information really helps a lot in this article. It makes me think deeper, a dusty, noisy and poor place in the daytime can has its other side in the night time. And it's happy and warm.
In Quinonez’s excerpt, he uses words to paint out a vivid picture of Spanish Harlem at night. His usage of descriptive words and details captured my sensory organs in many ways. I can feel the “hot” weather on a spring night. He uses metaphor to describe night time in Harlem as glowing “pearls.” I can clearly imagine the beautiful scene. I am able to hear the salsa music blasting from the boom box, and picturing all the women dancing while their children are playing; they are all having a wonderful time. The scene “old men played dominoes as they drank Budweisers...” reminds me of gatherings I have attended; and Budweisers always had an unpleasant and bitter smell it to.
Detailed information is an important role in critical thinking, reading and observation because it enables the audience to visualize and understand the writer’s purpose. Including detailed information is also an element to connect with the reader and capture their attention.
Hello Chanda,
I liked how you gave an example of using detailed information to describe the park. You are absolutely right, rather than saying "I was at the park, it was cool, you should go.” Including details in your writing can allow the reader to picture what is actually going on, and to persuade the reader to continuing reading.
Hello Sin,
I liked the way you gave a detailed descrption of how you felt as you were on the scene.Also the description of old men playing dominoes.
I totally agree with you when you said that detailed information gives readers a clear picture of what is happening, and is good because people rely more and more on written communication.The ability to write well becomes more vital.
I can see the buildings and environment by the authors’ description. By his words, I can see water is everywhere; men and women are dancing, children are playing, old men are drinking. I can hear people laughing while music is playing. I can smell Mexican food. In critical writing, detailed information brings readers into a vivid scene which is recorded by colorless letters. Detailed information is very important for readers to understand an atmosphere of a story.
Hey Martin, I agree with what you said about critical requiring detailed writing because without the right details used in the right way, our audience will not feel like reading our papers and they won't feel as passionate about the subject that we are talking about. We have to make sure that we don't bore our audience so that they not only understand our opinion, but also feel that they have a purpose for listening to what we have to say.
From Quiononez's excerpt, he used his unique writing style to express the sensory organs. I could easily have vision of the region without actually going there. One of the sense that he metioned was "the women were dancing to salsa blaring from a boom box on the cement". It really gave us a fully descrition that we could touch, see, smell, taste, and hear it. At that moment, I had a short slide in my mind of a woman dancing. Details played an important role in citical thinking because the more detail you put in your writing, the more illusion that the readers would possiblly have in their mind, also it helps reader completely get into your piece of writing.
Hi Misty Horn,
i totally agree with the the way you see details in citical thinking, in some way, i do think observion help us think deeper, just so we don't judge the surface. A citical thinker would observe before writing an essay similar to life you observe before making any judgement.
All sensory organs were captured in the excerpt . Quiononez did a great job giving details of the environment, which allows us to feel the way we feel.
Correction the comment from Ricky and Werdah, is actually from Misty. My mistake.
I agree, Quiononez's detailed writing played a relevant role in capturing our sensory organs.
All sensory organs were caputured in hthe excerpt. The writer did a great job with detail. The writing allowed the reader to be in the moment, as though observing for themselves.
I agree with you that the audience needs to visualize and understand what the writer's purpose for writing. If the it's not, then the audience would just be confused and uninterested. Quiononez was able to engage his audience by including all the sensory organs which actually made the excerpt relatable.
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